My Writing Goal

My writing goal for the past term has been to write different genres of writing.  On this google doc, I have told you what genre of writing it is, what the title of the writing is, and I put in a link to the piece of writing.

If you read any or all of the pieces of writing, I would appreciate a comment.

Fact or Fiction?

On the first day back after the school holidays, Mrs. Parkes had us write a story about what we did in the holidays.  But there was a twist to it.  We could make our story completely true, partly true and partly made up, or totally fiction (made up).

After reading that do you think it is fact, fiction, or part of both?  Answer in the comments, and I can tell you if you’re right.  

Traveling Rush

We were finally in the air.  We had been delayed in Oakland ,California for about 2 hours!  
Being delayed that long would make a tight connection for our next flight.

We landed in Los Angeles, C.A. with about 40 minutes till we had to be checked in to our next flight.   We quickly exited the plane and made our way to the baggage claim.  We waited for our suitcases to come into view and pulled them off.  We started as quickly as we could to try to find our way to the international terminal.  

Once we knew where to go to the international terminal we didn’t wait to start running to get there.  We were in terminal 1 and we had to pass terminal 2 and 3 to get there.  My mom was pushing one of the airport trolleys that had 3 suitcases stacked on it.  I was pulling a suitcase, as was my younger sister, Sage.  

Sage and I were following our mom, trying not to fall behind her too far.  

My youngest sister, Joyce, was trying to run beside my mom but eventually she slowed down and started to be left behind.  My mom picked Joyce up and held her on the cart.  

When Sage got tired. I took the suitcase she was pulling and tried to keep both suitcases going straight.  

When we had mode it to halfway past terminal 3 I started getting tired.  We kept going and we encouraged each other.  Working together we pulled through and made it to where we needed to check in.  

According to my mom’s phone we had three minutes left.  We talked to one of the people behind the desk.  They said we were too late.  My Mom showed them her phone to show we had 3 minutes left.  They took our bags and checked us in!  We were relieved.  I felt that it was worth the run even though we were all tired and it felt really good to rest.  

In the end we made our flight by working as a team and keeping on going even when we were tired.

Biking Experience

This is a video about my experience with the biking skills program, I am talking in the background, there is photos of the event in the foreground.

Sunset

Sunset

This is the setting sun

For today its job is done

The sky is a beautiful red

As I get ready for bed

When I drift off to sleep 

The sun goes down deep

But I know that later

It will come back around the equator.  

Sunset- Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sunset

Bike Writing

I have used show not tell in my first paragraph. I want the reader to feel how excited I felt when they read this. Can you tell me if this is what you feel?

There's the swimming pool...and the running track! The day has come at last. Dad parked the the car and we got it out.  What happens if I crash?  I could get hurt!  We walked through the gate and I got on.  It was a little bit hard to get on but dad helped me.  I held on the handle bars and dad held on the back.  He pushed me slowly at first.  I was riding a bike!

I'd love to hear what you think what I did well/what could I do better.